Hi Mike,
What an awesome article, I really enjoyed it and your vision of how we might better build consensus. You obviously put a great deal of thought into how to maximize the fairness of consensus through networked drafting of consensus norms. This is a neglected area and I'm glad to see that someone is filling the void. I would love to see a longer work focused just on that which explains your reasoning and conclusions in greater detail, or better yet, that and the software to put it into practice. You have provided a very valuable idea for the future of humanity, and for that I would be wholly satisfied if you were to win this contest.
Now, I do have one quibble. It turns out that superluminal signaling has a long history, stretching back to the 19th century in the work of the ultimate modern scientific genius and pioneer, Nikola Tesla. Now, no one believed him then, but there have been numerous replications and other methods which have confirmed everything he discovered. I recommend reading "Transmit radio messages faster than light," by Ishii & Giakos (Microwaves & RF, 1991). This article describes non-transverse (i.e., longitudinal) electromagnetic waves and provides equations which show that they can be superluminal. Not only that, but they produced non-transverse radio waves and measured pulse transit times corresponding to 5.0242 x108 m/s in one experiment, and 4.43 x108m/s in another.
Now, marginal superluminality such as that would not change your first premise much, but other technologies involving tight gravity wave beams, found in experiments carried out in Russia by Eugene Podkletnov, demonstrated pulse velocities in excess of 64c! (64c was the limit of what they could measure, and the signal maxed out their instruments.) These signals were certainly robust--in one experiment they were able to punch a hole in a steel plate with them.
As you research this topic, you'll find a lot of talk about the distinction between group velocity and phase velocity, along with an argument to the effect that this distinction means that--even though superluminal phase velocities have been detected--no communicative signal can be transmitted superluminally. However, as Ishii and Giakos point out at the beginning of their article, this distinction is only relevant for analog signals. A digital signal can be transmitted at the phase velocity. Of course, all the cold water you will find being thrown around in an attempt to discredit the significance of longitudinal wave superluminality isn't even relevant to what Podkletnov and his team demonstrated years ago.
Now, in my opinion, even if you were to remove premise one and the paragraphs based on it, the thrust of your article would not change significantly. What you constructed from premise one was a nice idea, but it does not correspond to the true limitations of conceivable communication technologies.
All in all, I really found your article to be a valuable contribution, and I have rated it accordingly. I wish you all the best here and in everything you do.
Warmly,
Aaron