Dear Stuart,
As I promised in my FQXi page, I have read your beautiful Essay, which gave me a lot of fun. Here are my comments:
1) As I am a physicist of gravitation, I strongly appreciate the importance that you give to a better understanding of gravitational theory in your nice dream that the ultimate goal of the humanity is to reach for the stars and colonize worlds beyond our own.
2) I find very beautiful that you compare the transferring information from one human generation to the next with elementary particle physics where a particle is annihilated and only its information survives and is passed on to the next generation.
3) The idea that we could have "cybernetic egos" in near future gives me a bit of fear
4)I find a problem in your definition of higher order sub events when you write that "higher order sub events are more curled up according to GR than the low order events because of their high energy densities." In fact, the total energy depends on coordinates in general relativity. This is due to Einstein Equivalence Principle, which implies that one can always choice a reference frame, the one of the free falling observer, where the gravitational field is always null. This in turn implies that, although the gravitational energy has a global contribute, we cannot localize it. Thus, you cannot discriminate between higher order and low order sub events based on their high energy densities. Notice that, in my opinion, this is exactly the greatest difficulty that we today have in order to really quantize gravity.
5) Your statement on "the simultaneously increasing the Schwarzschild radius (same behaviour as an electron in an atomic orbital)" is in complete agreement with my Essay Bohr-like model for black holes: the route for quantum gravity
In any case, I find your Essay excellent, elegant and particular. Thus, I am going to give you an high score.
I have no access to International Journal of Geometric Methods in Modern Physics, but I have read the title of your paper which is very interesting and explains the reason of your questions in my Essay page. Can you send me a pdf copy of it via email?
I wish you good luck in the Contest.
Cheers, Ch.