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Hi Chidi,
I read your essay (and now that we have an extra week the pressure is off a bit). Your essay has interesting point and I will touch on some of them below as questions or comments. However, on e general comment (which I see was already picked up by some other commentators above is that your tried to put too much into the essay so that it is hard to follow the logic thread at points.
But there were interesting observations in the essay which I would like to point out to ask questions on.
The first thing is actually a question as to what you mean on page 2 by "no two [quantum] measurements can yield quite the same results." If you measure the energy states of a hydrogen atom that is swimming in some thermal background, which can with some probability excite the hydrogen with some probability to various excited states, then as you measure the hydro gen atom at some points you will (with some probability) measure the hydrogen to be in the same energy state. Thus there are cases where the measurement of a quantum system will show that the system is in the same eigenstate. Now maybe you mean that no two fermions can be in the same quantum state? This is true but then it is not clear that this is what you mean. In any case the statement is a bit unclear and maybe wrong.
I like the story about the chimps -- it reminds we of a similar story of a mathematician and his wife who were to leave on a trip but they wanted to check that they had the correct number of suitcase -- three suitcases. The mathematician would come back saying there were two suitcases and the wife came back with thee. When they both went back to count the suitcases together the mathematician starts "zero, one, two -- see I told you there were two."
You talk about the fine-tuning of cosmology/origin stories of physicist/creationist. I was not clear of the point here, but one ting to note is that physicist general look for ways to avoid fine-tuning (for example inflation is supposed to avoid of the the fine-tuning issues of cosmology -- although it ends up introducing some other issues similar to fine-tuning). For a creationist fine tuning if fine, great even since in the fine tuning they can see "the hand of God".
At several points in the essay you use h_0 which you say is the "threshold potential of the action potential in man precisely 55 millivolts." Where does this come from?
Lastly your mention "Humanity is going to get technology (like lie detectors!)". In fact there was some article a few years back about an FMRI (functional magnetic resonance imaging) "lie detector". This device as I understood would give you a real time MRI image and by looking at blood flow in the brain you could tell if a person was lying or not. This was supposed to work 100% as long as the person knew they were lying. If they were delusional or didn't remember the act they were lying about. But if the lie were purposeful then this FMRI method was supposed to be fool proof.
There are some good issues raised in your essay. My main suggestion would have been to focus it more narrowly (this is hard since the question is broad and the page/word limit is strict). Best of luck with the contest.
Best,
Doug