Dear Ted,
As I promised in my Essay page, I have read your particular Essay. Here are my comments:
1) Although with delay, I send you my condolences for the death of your marathon swimming son Jon.
2) I find your statement ""Feelings" guide the many achievements of physicists, mathematicians, and yes, even swimmers" very nice and correct.
3) I agree with you that duality is a fundamental property of nature.
4) I am fascinated by swimming. Congrats for your and Jon's records.
5) Do you think that your statement that "tiny-small-big things (e.g., photons, electrons, protons, molecules, bacteria, animals, whales, etc.) must have a panpsychist awareness of each other's presence to sustain a workable and definable system-environment link" could have some connection with Brownian motion?
6) Your statement that particles could have an unknown property of nature (memory?) could have interesting implications on the black hole information puzzle, see my paper Ann. Phys. 353, 71 (2015), pre-print here.
In any case, I found your Essay very nice. Thus, I will give you a high rate.
I wish you best luck in the Contest.
Cheers, Ch.