Dear Jonathan,
I am going to disappoint you ! I never felt so handicapped perusing any essay as I felt while reading this. I had to consult and learn the mathematical terms afresh. Took the whole day just doing that. Even then my knowledge fell short to understanding dense / cryptic use of mathematics and their implications. So, I am not in a position to add value with my analysis.
My general style is to comment on the whole of the essay as a theme, whether it is in line with the idea of this essay contest, but I cannot do that in this case. I am reduced to picking only those statements that I could understand, even if it meant taking them out of the context. Your statements are double quoted before my responses.
"This lends support to the author's idea that nature employs the totality of all Mathematics - discovered and undiscovered - in its handiwork, such that invariant realities in Math spell out their own importance to Physics, and give rise to the universe we see today."
Not all of known mathematics is useful in describing the physical reality. Furthermore, it does not appear that mathematical methods can have any kind of limits, they can be discovered ad infinitum, irrespective of their applicability in describing the natural function.
"In my view; the laws of nature arise largely because the Math has its own ideas about what is relevant to Physics, and also engenders the evolution of form that is capable of consciousness and volition. So in this essay; I will spell out, in some measure, what I think Mathematics is telling the universe to create."
You seem to be ascribing volition to mathematics, as if it has causal power of its own. Could mathematics function on its own, or if material things are required to carry out the function of applicable mathematics?
"Nature is not limited by our views about what in Math is relevant to physical law." -- Agreeable.
"If multiplication depends on the order of the elements being multiplied together and even on how they are grouped, then at one fell swoop, geometry enters the calculation in an organic way. The Principle of Indeterminacy could then arise in a natural fashion from relativistic considerations, making quantum theory a consequence of an underlying 8-dimensional hidden-variable process, very much in the flavor of the theories of de Broglie and Bohm." [3] So we see that octonion Math dictates emergence."
I read it so many times, yet I could not understand any of the assertions, how they followed from non-associative multiplication. Certainly I am not enlightened enough in maths and physics to judge this essay.
I am sorry, I cannot evaluate.
Rajiv
P.S. Previously, the comment appeared under Anonymous.