Dear Don,
Good to meet again in the newest contest. I really like these FQXi contests because you can receive thoughts from other thinkers on your ideas, like your approach.
In the first paragraph of your abstract, you gave in my opinion already the indication of causal emergence (each new layer of emergence influences the next one). I don't know if you can underwrite this.
"We have recently been detecting them en mass on the cosmological scale as dark matter and dark energy.". The only remark I can make here is that both dark matter and dark energy are still "unknown phenomena". Do you catalogue them as that?
Page 5: First you mention :"Dark Matter as developed here, is a line of mass (a bundle of gravitons)", then you say:"I believe the answer is that this graviton mass is a wave phenomenon and manifests quite differently than observable mass such as a golf ball or planet, and to detect it we need to couple to it.". I can agree with the wave phenomenon, but that the gravitons would be a bundle between as you say 2 planets is hard for me to believe because this implicates that each "particle" in our reality has a specific "bundle". Maybe I am totally wrong because I am not an expert like you.
Page 6: "This graviton mass is distributed in such a way as to make the universe expand at an accelerated rate." Does this mean that in the last 5 billion years ago the number of gravitons have changed in a way to have accelerated the universe?
"These galaxy to galaxy gravitons have less mass than inter-galaxy gravitons, but they outnumber the inter-galaxy gravitons and are dominant in the universe".Here you introduce different masses for gravitons for different areas of reality. It is a bit like in the "Standard Model". In the beginning, it was comprehensible but it was growing and growing so...If your model could work with just ONE graviton, it would be more acceptable I think.
Note 3: the "big end" in my view is just a crossing point in the sinus-wave of what we call the "history" of our emerging reality.
Page 7:"But the most amazing thing about the graviton prism is that it curves the path of light and also curves the path of ordinary masses (according to general relativity)" I like this part of your model very much, but you still have to convince me about the essential character of the graviton.
"Physics is amazing, but I believe that completeness is not one of its properties. And it keeps on getting better." I can fully underwrite that. The intelligence of humanity is only existing one second and is its beginning, it is not so long ago that we all thought that the sun was turning around the earth. I just don't think that we (and the next generations) will be able to find the ultimate foundations of our reality. You can also see that in all the essays that we are encountering now in this contest.
I liked your approach of the problems we are all struggling with, a very thoughtful essay and I brought you UP a little in this "goofy" contest because you are trying to escape from the establishment. I also hope that again you will read, comment and maybe also rate my contribution "Foundational Quantum Reality Loops" where I attack the same problems as you did.
Best regards and good luck
Wilhelmus de Wilde