Dear Steven -- the best introduction I have read for a long time -- I love the tone and style and the way you make it feel so personal and you can feel the power of the forces of nature.
I see many common threads in your essay with some of the other high-ranking writers in this great competition of the FQXi community.
Your essay fills the mind with many new ideas and connections -- I have read a number of times the comments by the other people -- some are excellent like Edwin's and Peter Jackson's just to name a few of the obvious one's -- some not so like Álvarez's comments which are combative to say the least (and not generally helpful you should see the long long list of nit-picking "so-called mistakes" in my essay LOL) but you handle that with style and grace (well done).
As to your fab essay (I will not repeat previous comments which you have answered fully) I have a couple of comments
Does your model form a complete metaphysical system (on the surface that is what you are aiming for I feel) in regards to how the "metaphysical" and the "physical" are dealt with -- it comes across that the metaphysical is metaphorical and has a special status a part from the physical. It seems that the "cause" of metaphysics is "the nature of the "dual" aspects of how time is handled" that is evolution. As Edwin points out there is a strong surface resemblance in your essay to his idea that "what time we see on the clock face" is counting 'energy" while for you it is counting F vis "forces cause clocks to function"! you have spotted a deep connection between the face of the clock and the "the mechanism that drives the clock" as two different "conceptions" I think, that is, a very deep insight.It is not clearly expressed in physics texts enough that clocks in GM measure "duration' the difference between the start and the end of an "event". So an "event" can only reference another durations but only in restricted cases, so how events are connected is mysterious yet you conjecture they are connected to "forces qm and (classical)" which do have a strong concept of "events" eg the sum of all histories approach and or individual atom collision which we can mathematically determine "properties" of this one "event". So what is "time in general" is never dealt with explicitly in GR (only durations) or QM (only events). And it isn't even clear in our current theories if we can connect "different" durations as one whole to get a "holistic" picture of all durations (which we hope can be thought of as "time" since there is nothing else that functions on clocks apart from "duration" and forces=events) OR the totality of all "QM events" as one whole "concept" which could be equated with "time". You identify correctly this "paradox" clearly and precisely in your essay. Durations and events but what is "time" is just left hanging up in the air so to speak. Hence you make primary "cause" and avoid this "lack of specification of time itself". So is the cause of metaphysics beyond "durations" or "events" or is it due to "our inbuilt cognitive processes that are fine-tuned to the survival of the fittest in an ecosystem". It isn't clear "what your pan-evolution" environment is exactly. Mass is due to the Higgs field in QM not to "Gluon activity [which] is the primary giver of mass" while "mass is Tuv=Guv in GR)" as you point out. A new paper (see link) shows that Some black holes [can] erase your past or Einstein's equations allow a non-determinist future inside some black holes!
So is time itself (as a thing-in-itself) the cause of "cause" in your metaphysics. As John English (and many before him) have pointed out evolution (or life) is due to "microstate filling order of marcoscopic entities" or the driving force of life is thermodynamics. Can life be considered a "force" as in a metaphysical manifestation of the metaphorical "thing-in-itself", and is it not really this "metaphysical force" that has the twin aspects that you mention in your essay as pertaining to clocks. We have a built-in clock "how DNA mutates at a constant rate" maybe you can add that to your purely physical explanation of "all interactions" of a clock. It would strengthen your argument a lot and would explain "this constant tick tock of the change of life-forms" for the animate, which nicely divides the inanimate from the animate.
Secondly -- as pointed out it is Newton's law that is "wrong" in galaxies not GR, apart from that small technical mix-up, your point is that "life force" has cause that is "how we survive the progress of the universe from one tick to the next tock (so to speak), epistemological evolution says there is no "final predetermined goal to evolution" -- local affects are primary -- why do we have eyes that are perfectly adapted to the colour spectrum of the sun because the sun is the colour due to contingence". In full If you notice a fact about the world, you can put it in one of two categories: necessary or contingent. A necessary fact is one that has to be the case, whereas contingent facts could have been different. Contingency means the outcome was the result of events that might have occurred differently, whereas necessity means the outcome could only ever have gone one way.
So you can think of it as a sliding scale:
Necessary: must happen, cannot not happen
Contingent: could happen or not, possible
Impossible: cannot happen, could not have happened
Is the time on the face contingent or necessary for evolution. Ask the same question for the mechanism for the clock workings.
I feel this basic distinction isn't clearly delineated in the essay. Is the purely metaphysical thing-in-itself necessary or contingent in your schema it isn't obvious. What is necessary for clocks to "function" and what is contingent is not clear if we can make "life itself a clock". Clearly what is necessary is the "mechanism" and what is contingent is the time on the clock. Yes how can you reconcile that with the inverse of that for "life" what is necessary is thermodynamics what is contingent is the actual "life-form" itself. So doesn't that imply that TIME itself as a thing is contingent or are we inferring too much by making TIME necessary for the tick-tock of life's progress as a clock face. If you think of a DNA clock with face marks for each each life-form from the previous -- doesn't your theory -- suggest we are necessary, it strongly does. If you think along those lines -- life as a clock and its face shows the progress of evolution, what is the "mechanism" of the clock now and what is the "force" -- these are the best questions to think about. I have to say your essay is very deep and slightly perplexing as well.
I hope you find some food for thought on my initial reading of your essay. My [link:fqxi.org/community/forum/topic/3133]essay[/linl] is here if you have time please read. It is all about the "imaginary unit"
Like you I don't do low ratings. I only rate essays that set my mind a thinking. Since I cannot judge ones that don't make me think. And yours as done that a lot so I have rated it very highly. Yours Harri