I like what you have written Shawn...
You have presented an interesting result that proves something relevant to the essay question. But the connection is abstruse. The significance might pop out for Renate Loll or Lee Smolin, but most people would miss it. So given that you did not build a stronger bridge between early universe stuff and uncertainty or unpredictability in the current era, nor did you explain why that significance might be model-independent; I can only give you partial credit.
A good exposition for what you did set out, in any case.
Warm Regards,
Jonathan
