Hello Ian, Neil Bates here. I am very impressed by the literary quality of your piece, as well as the broad interdisciplinary scope and variety of picking various conceptual metaphors and points to make. Certainly something worthy of publication in a semi-popular science education forum. I must agree that issues of language in science and even basic description of experience can't be brushed aside. Too often, authors take the material of their discussions as simple clear givens. This is so despite decades of wrangling over the philosophical problems of quantum mechanics and even the scientific method. It is important in issues of the peculiar "Renninger null measurement" where we presume a "wavefunction" must have rearranged because a detector that COULD have found a particle showed a negative result. And what about unreliable detectors? Can they have ontological significance?
I haven't seen much similar to your speculations about the effective relativity of calculation. Some would say "so what" because math is conceived as a perfect Platonic thing in itself, yet foundational mathematicians still argue over discovery versus construction, the viability of unmet counterfactuals, etc.
Also: If you or other readers might take at look at my own piece, addressing the issue of the strong correlations of entanglement and how neo-mechanistic models of quantum physics aren't enough - it could use some votes on this last day. Thank you.