IvoryPeafowl
After trawling through several rather 'florid' essays here I was initially put off by the metaphorical flourish of "Life’s chemistry unfolds in a riot of vibrations..." and thought 'gods please not another one!' However, this essay shifts straight into logical gear with its guiding question:
does invoking specific quantum structure explain something better about function than any classical account constrained to the same observables and resources?
Followed by a brief executive summary of what appears to be a rather interesting proposal for an experimental program which would itself make for a rather interesting research oriented essay ... brief as in it's just 10k (<2 pdf pages) out of the 25k characters allowed for submission. You've got another 5 days before the submission deadline, so some natural language explication for us nonspecialists in your discipline would have made for a better read, for me at least.
The 3 research paths – de-localisation, spin-coherence and tunnelling – could do with a general intro 'picture' about what you're testing, what the test is, and then what you're looking for ... in terms a general informed audience might be able to hook into. Otherwise, this reads more like a summary for a research funding proposal for specialist readers. Do the same with your methodologies, metrics and outcomes, beef up the conclusion, and then your 'minimalist experimental approach' with its 'fair classical comparisons' would indeed point us nonspecialists towards a way forward with informative outcomes whether the results are positive or null, and in just 6-7 pages of text!