When I was reading your essay, these things stood out to me:
Obviously the layout structure and heading are missing.
Plus: Well written, readable essay. Good flow. Writer seems knowleadgable in their field, detailed exposition of biological phenomena.
Minus: no structure, missing layout. Short. I was expecting more quantum mechanical magic sauce, but maybe it is not my expertise, as this was about actual biology and not a philosophical exploration.
Thumbs up (i.e., a like) from me