Dear Georgina,
I enjoyed reading your essay. You do a very nice job of explaining and exploring a vast array of ideas, problems, and paradoxes in a concise manner. A few thoughts come to mind:
1. Regarding your first section (facts) points 1 and 3, I would point out that general relativity works only if we assume that the phenomena we call "dark matter" and "dark energy"are really due to some strange type of matter and energy rather than different dynamics.
2. Your second section summarizes the problems very well. Regarding points 6 and 8, I have some ideas about this (I see you do, too!). Many of the paradoxes of relativity arise from allowing time and causality to conflict with each other (the grandfather paradox, which you mention on page 6, is an example of this). My idea about this is that time is really just a way of talking about cause and effect. Instead of having a mysterious "time dimension," our concept of time may come just from noticing that cause and effect always occur in a specific order (hence, we say "cause comes before effect.") This explains the arrow of time too; the arrow of times is just given by the direction from cause to effect. This is part of what I call the causal metric hypothesis. If you're interested, you might look at my essay here, where I explain how this works.
3. I spent a while with my head turned to the side looking at your diagram 1. There's a lot to consider here. You ascribe the arrow of time to "continual sequential change of the arrangement of Object universe and unidirectional input of data from Object reality to Image reality." I am not quite sure what you mean by Object universe; is it a universe of "objects," or is it "objective," meaning it exists regardless of what we observe?
4. I agree with the statement, "As space-time is emergent output from data processing not an observer independent reality, the curvature of space-time is not the cause of gravity." I think that "spacetime" is a way of talking about cause and effect.
5. On point 13: quaternions, twistors, geometric algebra, and Clifford algebras are all important and underappreciated.
6. I think that objects and clocks are, once again, ways of talking about cause and effect, but this is a long story...
7. I either agree with you, or lean toward the same conclusions as you do, on the "wrong assumptions" (page 6). I also agree with most what you say in your postulates.
8. What you say in your "Data Pool" section (page 7) sounds similar to my "causal configuration space. Also, Wolfram's ideas are somewhat similar to mine.
Thanks for the fascinating read, and good luck in the contest! Take care,
Ben Dribus