Dear Michael,
your essay is particularly effective in suggesting the idea that the deeper we go in investigating fundamental physics on one hand, and in creating unifying concepts in mathematics on the other, the more we find that the latter 'cover' the former.
I wonder, however, whether unification is as desirable in Math as it is in Physics.
One could argue, for example, that Math, like music, favours creativity, variety of concepts, forms, and their relations, while Physics is dominated by minimality, and by the urge to find the smallest single explanation for the dynamics of the physical universe.
On the other hand, if unification makes sense also in mathematics (in a way that you do not seem to fully address in your essay), and the two paths eventually converge to the same formal structure, then would you go as far as concluding, with Tegmark, that the physical world IS a mathematical structure?
A final point, inspired by this a quote from Murray Gell-Mann:
"Life can emerge from physics and chemistry plus a lot of accidents. The human mind can arise from neurobiology and a lot of accidents, the way the chemical bond arises from physics and certain accidents. Doesn't diminish the importance of these subjects to know they follow from more fundamental things plus accidents."
'Accidents' are primarily responsible for the way several important aspects of the universe (e.g. humans) look like.
Should accidents be also part of the ultimate theory of everything?
If so, the motives-based unifying theory that you envisage in your essay would still be quite preliminary. When concepts such as accidents, emergence, evolution, 'history' come on stage, I believe that notions of algorithmic, computational universe, with their rich array of emergent properties, become quite appropriate and effective.
Best regards
Tommaso
PS
I find that revealing the assigned scores is bad practice - you'll notice that this happens only when the score is very high. Taking at least a look at the essay from someone who commented your essay - that is good practice! Thank you and good luck!